Colleagues - A handful of editorial comments.
Lines
4 and 31. This is a committee spec., not an OASIS
spec..
Line
5. Perhaps, we should just assign a document id. Let's not wait for
an OASIS numbering system.
Lines
11 - 24. Needs updating. Also suggest removing email
addresses. Also Appendix D.
Line
995. Wrong font.
Line
1950. " ... be combined by the algorithm specified by ..." becomes " ...
be combined using the algorithm specified by ..." (Just removes
repetition of "by").
Line
2612. "The selected node is different from the node types listed
above". But the list above contains constructor functions (according to
line 2583).
Lines
2635 - 2645. Non-normative language. In four place "is" should be
"SHALL be".
Lines
3107 - 3117 and lines 3130 - 3144. The phrases in the text don't match the
phrases in the table. e.g. "At least one applicable" in the text, whereas
"At least one rule value is its Effect" in the table.
Lines
3172 - 3193. I am personally still not happy with this explanation.
I don't have a specific proposal. But, one signal that something is wrong
comes from the fact that in line 3175 we say that "A named attribute is the
term for the criteria ...". But, in line 3180 we say that "A named
attribute has specific criteria ...". Is "attribute instance" more
descriptive than "named attribute"?
I
should point out that most of these comments apply to the original editor's
work. All the best. Tim.
-----Original Message-----
From: Simon Godik
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Subject: [xacml] xacml
1.1 draft 1
Here is xacml 1.1 draft 1
Please let me know if I left something
out.
Simon
