RE: proposed Executive Summary paragraph
Bob Miller's suggestions are excellent. But we need to
go further. One example:
(i don't propose a rewording, because i don't know what this wants to mean.)
facilitates the infrastructure release ...
(i don't propose a rewording, because i don't know what this wants to mean.)
Cordially,
Joaquin
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Joaquin Miller
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Financial Systems Architects
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